His Perfect One by J.S. Danielle
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Story Rating: 2 out of 5 paddles
Sting Factor (kink): 1 out of 5
“His Perfect One” is about the love of a man who has kept it suppressed deep down inside for quite some time. Will his perfect one be just what he needs to bring it out? Devin was a master to women, lover of the female form, until the one closest to him, left him. Angry, antisocial and a bit outspoken, Devin dives headfirst into work, but is leery of all things female. Will he ever find the girl who loves him for him? Aria was the perfect girl next door: intelligent, beautiful, outspoken and feisty. She just needed the right person to bring that out of her. Too bad her first wasn’t it. Tired of being led around, Aria puts her lovelife into the hands of her best friend. . .and that’s not all she gives up! In search of the epitome of love, fate allowed Devin to cross paths with Aria. Together, in search of love, theirs is the perfect one.
Believe me, Devin has a lot more to work on than being angry, antisocial and a bit outspoken. He tells us that since his mother’s death five years ago, he “hasn’t worked up the nerve to physically fuck a woman.”
Somehow, he is supposedly a very experienced and sought-after Dominant.
Enter Aria, a sexually inexperienced woman who decides in the blink of an eye that she wants to be a sub. Devin sees her after a workout and is so turned on, he gets into a gym shower where he “releases eighteen months of cum.” After the act, memories of his deceased mother again creep in. If you read the book, you’ll lose track of how many times this boy’s mama appears in his thoughts at the most inopportune moments. Talk about an erotic buzz-kill.
Aria is described as a “smart, quick-witted, threateningly domineering but placating woman with long, sleek black hair that’s straighter than any hetero male.” Her friend arranges for her to be presented to potential Doms, and guess who happens to be looking for a sub? Yes, you guessed it! And Devin is so smitten with her, he immediately falls on his knees, pulls her thigh over his shoulder, brings her to orgasm, collars her, and whisks her off to his mansion where he has sex with her repeatedly.
Please understand, I will be the first to say that anyone who has the discipline to sit in a chair and complete an entire book deserves much credit. However, when attempting to write an erotic novel, a character’s mother surely has no place in sex play, yet Devin’s mother may as well have pulled up a chair and watched every time. Also, should you choose to read the book, you will encounter humorous-but-confusing dangling modifiers, and the use of countless cringe-worthy metaphors that have no place in the description of a sexual encounter.
Reviewed by Summer Sterling