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The Sentence of Anna by A.H. Scott 

http://www.amazon.com/The-Sentence-Of-Anna-ebook/dp/B006LQ65W4/ref=sr_1_2?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1342746235&sr=1-2&keywords=The+Sentence+of+Anna 

ASIN B006LQ65W4 

Story Rating: 1 out of 5 paddles

Sting Factor (kink): 2 out of 5 

Review:

Anna loves to flirt with Valery, her lover’s best friend.  Philippe is a wealthy Duke who plucked peasant Anna from obscurity.  Anna is the current mistress for the past three years.  She is with Philippe because he shows her the good life.  He’s neither a good lover nor particularly handsome, but he does shower Anna with luxuries.

This historical romance is written in an unwieldy style.  The writer’s voice is drowned out with purple prose and too many adjectives.  Flowery wording does not equate to a flowing smooth writing voice.  It is one thing for the characters’ dialog to contain flamboyant speech; it’s another thing when the entire story and narration is crammed with flashy words which jar the reader out of the story. 

The concept of this story is okay.  We find Anna cheating on Philippe, getting caught and then punished.  The punishment and the illicit sex could be steamier.  The excessive usage of purple prose changes what could be smexy into something silly.  It would be better if the A.H. Scott focus on a cleaner dialog with more showing rather than telling.  The changing point of views between the three characters also distracts from the storyline. 

The Sentence of Anna by A.H. Scott

http://www.amazon.com/The-Sentence-Of-Anna-ebook/dp/B006LQ65W4/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1339991533&sr=1-1&keywords=the+sentence+of+anna#_ 

ASIN B006LQ65W4 

Story rating: 1 out of 5 paddles

Sting factor (kink): 1 out of 5

Blurb:

In 1747 France, the Duke of Givenchy, Philippe Paramour was a man of power and position. Philippe’s noble title gave him liberation of his most secret yearnings of debauchery. The Duke’s favorite past-time was taking female peasants under his wing as lovers and traveling companions across the French countryside.This is “The Sentence Of Anna”.

Anna’s sentence at times, would have been intolerable to a lesser woman of her immature age. But, what she gained under the strict tutelage of Philippe was the skills of maturity and demure sophistication.

Author A.H. Scott doles out a punishment of power, pride and passion in this tale of explosive encounters and ribald release.

Firm hand awaits…

 
Review:
The Sentence of Anna tries to be a medieval piece about a young girl and the two men she sleeps with both separately and together. It tries, but it fails in a big way. Grammatically, this story is nothing short of a hot mess. There is bad grammar, sentence structure, and punctuation. Quotation marks and commas are used incorrectly all the time except when they are forgotten and not used at all. Towards the end of the story there are random capitol letters in a few sentences for some unknown reason. The author almost never uses paragraphs and so you have single line after single line after single line of text.
 
The purple prose overflows to the point of no return.
Gentle vessel= mouth
Cliff of comfort= orgasm
Blossom of lust= a character being “turned on”
Slippery cave of comfort= vagina
Feasted on her flower= oral sex
Naughty nectar= sperm
Holes of harmony= vagina and ass during a three way
 
The chapter headings are  any place on the page and not at the top as you’d typically see in a book.
 
Because of all the issues with this story it’s hard to feel any connection or interest in the characters or story at all. There are so many distractions it’s overwhelming to the reader. The work is in serious need of an editing job and even then it wouldn’t help the actual story which is weak in it’s concept and light in BDSM and kink.
 
The recommendation for this one is to pass.
 
Reviewed by Elizabeth

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